Date of publication: 2017-07-09 11:18
Your introduction suffered from an excessive reliance on circular logic ("I seek an education because I am interested in education. I want to fine-tune my research skills because research skills are important to a career in education."). Sentences like these obscure rather than clarify your goals, and I sought to make your writing more active and transparent. I eliminated your entire first paragraph and incorporated your discussion of "purpose" into a new engaging introduction.
She was savage and superb, wild-eyed and magnificent..She stood looking at us without a stir and like the wilderness itself, with an air of brooding over an inscrutable purpose.
Instead of just describing what vocabulary means, we can often show it in the context of the data. In the following example, the labels connect the code and its output:
The epistemology of religion (claims about our understanding of God and our duties with respect to him) were tremendously contentious during Locke’s lifetime. The English Civil War, fought during Locke’s youth, was in large part a disagreement over the right way to understand the Christian religion and the requirements of religious faith. Throughout the seventeenth century, a number of fundamentalist Christian sects continually threatened the stability of English political life. And the status of Catholic and Jewish people in England was a vexed one.
Locke was regarded by many in his time as an expert on educational matters. He taught many students at Oxford and also served as a private tutor. Locke’s correspondence shows that he was constantly asked to recommend tutors and offer pedagogical advice. Locke’s expertise led to his most important work on the subject: Some Thoughts Concerning Education. The work had its origins in a series of letters Locke wrote to Edward Clarke offering advice on the education of Clarke’s children and was first published in 6698.
Some programming systems attempt to address this with a so-called "live coding" environment, where the output updates immediately as the code changes. An example of live coding:*
These frames or event responses form a natural way of "chunking" time. If the execution of a line of code is like a sentence, then a frame is like a chapter. These chapters can also be made tangible, so the programmer can understand the execution at this granularity as well.
A frequent question about the sort of techniques presented here is, "How does this scale to real-world programming?" This is a reasonable question, but it's somewhat like asking how the internal combustion engine will benefit horses. The question assumes the wrong kind of change.
Because the name of your company implies that you do small business development, a reader might be confused by your research in seemingly unrelated fields. Be sure that I accurately conveyed the essence of your professional responsibilities in my revised version of this paragraph.
As part of my master's thesis, I collaborated with Upward Bound, Peace Center, and the Davis Education Foundation to underline the importance of community cooperation in public schools. I also provided informational brochures and handouts detailing other such organizations that could assist with the individualized needs of schools. I was gratified when my efforts resulted in teachers and administrators contacting several of the organizations I had mentioned so that the organizations could start outreach in their educational districts.
This is a second form of create-by-reacting. In addition to reacting to the object under construction, the child is also reacting to the parts she has available. In the following example, the available functions are located adjacent to the coding area, and the programmer can skim over these "parts" and get ideas.
Now, instead of identical houses, she wants to vary the heights of the houses. She introduces another variable, and then converts it into an additional argument to the function.
In a memo to the president of Omega University, the music department chair argued that the university should expand the music-therapy program. This argument is substantially flawed. The argument presents inconclusive information, offering dubious support, and from this draws unreasonably far-reaching conclusions.
Logo uses the metaphor of "teaching the turtle a new word". To draw a face consisting of four circles, we can teach the turtle a subprocedure for drawing a circle, and then apply that subprocedure four times. Long and careful thought was given to the process by which a learner discovers the need for subprocedures, and then factors a large procedure into subprocedures.